IELTS Writing - Task 1 - Table (Percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry)

Tuesday, July 12, 2011

The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry in 1999-2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

This table shows home schooled students in Somecountry in year 1999-2004 in percentages.
Model answer:


The main trend is that all grades including kindergarten is growing every year. Kindergarten started highest at 2.4 and ended with percentage of 2.9 percent with a constant increase. But grades 1-2 and grades 5-6 show a little different trend, both started at 1,5 percent in 1999 and declines (declined) a little bit in 2000. Both of them increased slowly in 2002 and both held that course to 2004 where grades 1-2 reached 2,1 percent and grades 5-6 reached 2.6 percent.
Grades 3-4 had a slow but steady growth throughout all six years. It started at 1.6 percent in 1999 and increased by 0.1 every year except in 2003 when it peaked up at 0.2 percent. Grades 7-8 started at 1.6 percent and stays there for three years until it rapidly rised up to 2.2 and peaked at 2.5 in 2004.
Overall, all grades including kindergarten has had a rise at roughly minimum 1 percent and more in 6 years. 
This is a good report; here is how you can make it better: the coherence needs improvement, meaning the logical connection between sentences inside a paragraph and between paragraphs. Use more connective words (Furthermore, However, etc). 
The groupings you’ve done are fine, but try to use more variations describing those statistics: use words such as numbers, figures, percentages, etc. The grammar and the spelling need some extra attention

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